Thursday 16 May 2019

Writing Extension

On Monday 13th May I went to writiing extision and wrote two story's. For the first story we had a picture of a monkey sitting on a tree stump holding a leaf above his head sheltering him from the rain. For the second story we had to write a story but we were not allowed to use some words. Some of the words we were not allowed to use were Then, It, When... And so on. It was a fun challenge and I really enjoyed it.

Story One

It was another significantly humid day in the rainforest. The rain was a wonderfully refreshing break from everything. Dylan could hear loud and horror filled thunder claps off in the distance, a sign that there was a huge storm on the way. Grasping a leaf way bigger than himself he used it to shelter him from the rain while sitting comfortably on the edge of a tree stump. Raindrops that pounded on the leaf sounded like impatient fingertips, but Dylan didn't care as he knew his companions were on the way to him.

Story Two

Once upon a time, there was a colossal cottage which belonged to a despicable Giant called Kreature. One day Kreature stumbled upon an abnormally tiny house compared to his and the owner of the house was a tiny magical creature called Dobby. Kreature he thought it would be funny to stomp on Dobby's house and kill dobby but dobby felt giant Kreatures footsteps and got out of the way and used powerful magic to kill Kreature. Because Kreature was a giant the spell didn't work on him and dobby got squished by Kreature

2 comments:

  1. Well done Megan. Lovely use of language and interesting story. I am proud of you.

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  2. A powerfully descriptive piece of writing Megan. I like the way you have used verbs (grasping, pounded) to make your writing paint a clear picture for the reader. Your use of personification is also used perfectly (impatient fingertips) to build the mood in your writing.

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